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« Reply #50 on: 26/07/2006 22:14:16 »
Another from 2005, a few months later.

The Pain and The Pleasure


To banish the care, to banish the caution, to banish the thought,
To feel without care, that one’s senses are all,
That all is the moment, and tomorrow is not there,
To act with abandon, to act with passion,
To sense pain, to sense pleasure, and know not which is which,
To submit to pain, as to submit to love,
To submit to pleasure, as to submit to love,
That in this world, there is no other world,
That in this world of pain and pleasure, there is no world but love,
That all is banished but the moment,
That all is banished but love.



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« Reply #51 on: 26/07/2006 22:30:00 »


George - how wonderful and sensuous.


Love you lots.

Helena  xxx



 

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« Reply #52 on: 26/07/2006 22:57:50 »
Bravo George!!!  You really are good!!!  Teriffic Penning!!!  LOL

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« Reply #53 on: 28/07/2006 07:16:30 »
Darkness surrounds me here at this time!
I try to pray, but the words I can't find.

My heart is beating so slowly, my breaths are so shallow!
I feel his life over me, just like a shadow!

I try to cry out and my voice no longer helps me, the silence is so
loud that my own heartbeat is lost in the darkness that surrounds me!

I'm Feeling lost and afraid in this dark place I know, So I
must see with my mind for my heart won't let go!

I must not give in and allow it to take me,
I must hold on and not let it break me!

I have to hang on and climb up again, but Please God,
Please God, Hold tight to my friend!

                       ......Karen

« Last Edit: 06/02/2008 03:25:43 by Karen W. »

"Life is not measured by the number of Breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away."

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« Reply #54 on: 28/07/2006 13:21:10 »
How blue can I get, you could ask my heart. Just like a jugsaw puzzle
it's been torn all apart. A million words couldn't say just how I feel
. A million years from now, you know, I'll be loving you still.
The nights are lonely, the days are so sad and I just keep
thinkin' about the love that we had. And I'm missing you and
nobody knows it but me

"Lo" Loretta
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« Reply #55 on: 28/07/2006 16:18:55 »
MY TRUE LOVE


My heart cries out for your love dear!I know not what to do!
My thoughts are eratic and jumbled and each one is for you!

My soul is so enraptured by your love that my heart feels as if it were on fire! I love you sweetheart, you are my hearts desire!

You are the breath I take in the moning air, you are the strength I draw from when your not here!

 My soul cries out to touch you, my love for you is clear, such joy and elation just floods me every time that you are near!

My heart is entangled within your heart too, and I can't tell any more which part is me and which part is you!

Like a beautiful dream you come to me now, awaking me  sweetly, by kissing my brow!

Oh be still my heart as I open my eyes, My heart cries out  as I realize, Tis but a dream this vision of you; Not what it seems, My hearts broke in two!

 Oh Love, that you hear my voice and come to me my friend, like the gentle rain thats falling down upon my head again.

Reaching out to touch your face, remembering your warm embrace; Feeling your hands touching mine, my soul is yours throughout all time!

Oh my love, my true love, I hold you close right now! I breath you in and hold you here a captive of my heart! I could never be alone love for we will never be apart!

I love you sweatheart, I love you true, my heart knows no bounds because of this love for you!

So be still my beating heart, and loneliness will flee, as I have you here inside within each memory!

                    ..........Karen!
« Last Edit: 07/08/2006 10:57:13 by Karen W. »

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« Reply #56 on: 28/07/2006 17:38:57 »
Bravo Karen!  I wish I could post more, but so many of them are about Denny...it makes me cry...so I will enjoy yours and others...beautiful!!!

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« Reply #57 on: 28/07/2006 18:57:25 »


Wonderful my friends both of you, you have excelled yourselves,

but oh so sad.


Love you lots

Helena xxx


 

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« Reply #58 on: 28/07/2006 19:14:40 »
Thanks Helena!  The pain lessens each day and I will post some more soon..I promise for you romantic peeps...lol

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« Reply #59 on: 28/07/2006 21:06:42 »


Glad you're feeling better-

look forward to some 'more' poems.


Love you lots

Helena  xxx


 

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« Reply #60 on: 26/07/2006 11:41:13 »



George - what a beautiful, sensitive dream........if only.


Love you lots.

Helena   xxx



 

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« Reply #61 on: 26/07/2006 12:03:19 »
definitely that moment was a dream....hehe

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« Reply #62 on: 26/07/2006 21:39:25 »


George - how beautiful, and how touching.


Love you lots

Helena  xxx



 

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« Reply #63 on: 26/07/2006 22:30:00 »


George - how wonderful and sensuous.


Love you lots.

Helena  xxx



 

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« Reply #64 on: 28/07/2006 07:16:30 »
Darkness surrounds me here at this time!
I try to pray, but the words I can't find.

My heart is beating so slowly, my breaths are so shallow!
I feel his life over me, just like a shadow!

I try to cry out and my voice no longer helps me, the silence is so loud that my own heartbeat is lost in the darkness that surrounds me!

 I'm Feeling lost and afraid in this dark place I know, So I must see with my mind for my heart won't let go!

I must not give in and allow it to take me,
I must hold on and not let it break me!

 I have to hang on and climb up again, but Please God, Please God, Hold tight to my friend!

                       ......Karen

« Last Edit: 28/07/2006 15:29:54 by Karen W. »

"Life is not measured by the number of Breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away."

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« Reply #65 on: 28/07/2006 13:21:10 »
How blue can I get, you could ask my heart. Just like a jugsaw puzzle
it's been torn all apart. A million words couldn't say just how I feel
. A million years from now, you know, I'll be loving you still.
The nights are lonely, the days are so sad and I just keep
thinkin' about the love that we had. And I'm missing you and
nobody knows it but me

"Lo" Loretta
"Just Me, Lo" Loretta

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« Reply #66 on: 28/07/2006 17:38:57 »
Bravo Karen!  I wish I could post more, but so many of them are about Denny...it makes me cry...so I will enjoy yours and others...beautiful!!!

"Lo" Loretta
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« Reply #67 on: 28/07/2006 18:57:25 »


Wonderful my friends both of you, you have excelled yourselves,

but oh so sad.


Love you lots

Helena xxx


 

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« Reply #68 on: 28/07/2006 19:14:40 »
Thanks Helena!  The pain lessens each day and I will post some more soon..I promise for you romantic peeps...lol

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« Reply #69 on: 28/07/2006 21:06:42 »


Glad you're feeling better-

look forward to some 'more' poems.


Love you lots

Helena  xxx


 

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« Reply #70 on: 31/07/2006 20:29:33 »
Here is something else for you to enjoy...

Eden in sight

a rhythm in unspoken words she remains
where the ordinary and the dreaming worlds meet in our hearts

bright chance whispers onwards, vestiges of a moment unlooked for she is

as there the skies opening amidst the clouds, she lightens the way as shadows gray retreat

reality begins to affect those visions once tentatively held

wondering should i have traveled to those ephemeral gates of desire
where glory does reside in utter mystery

i have sought paradise and in this keen feeling reside not alone.


"Lo" Loretta
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« Reply #71 on: 31/07/2006 20:40:06 »


Nice one Loretta.


Love you lots.

Helena xxx





 

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« Reply #72 on: 01/08/2006 03:38:05 »
Beautiful Freind, I better get busy !

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« Reply #73 on: 01/08/2006 04:47:15 »
Thank you Helena!  I thought I would take you and Karen back of out of your world of reality and have you swing to the otherside of my warped daydreaming mind one day...I wish I still had the poetry when each of my kids were born...but I lost a lot of poetry, short stories I wrote, and much more...from a fire in 1998...I did not write again until 2003 as it was hard to be motivated to do so again...but here I am, writing all over again.  Thanks Karen!  You guys are the best...I may have to write something specific for you guys...hmmm...getting ideas

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« Reply #74 on: 01/08/2006 06:23:03 »
Loretta, Writing is such good therapy and it doesn't cost as much as a doctor, all though they have their place!!!!

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« Reply #75 on: 01/08/2006 06:47:32 »
Hey!  LOL  I do need a therapist..it is crazy out in this virtual jungle!  LOL  It does at times soothe my soul...

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« Reply #76 on: 01/08/2006 16:34:39 »
I can tell it does! It is good for me also!

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« Reply #77 on: 02/08/2006 04:32:13 »
Don't you just love it!  I wish I wrote more....but Denny wore me out with a bit of a challenge a while back...glad I won too, especially now!  May have to throw out a bit more..but later.  ;-)

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« Reply #78 on: 06/08/2006 18:56:56 »
YAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY !!!

All you people have written some exemplary stuff !!

YAYYYYYYY !!..I may have to post some serious stuff too !!!...just so that you know I can do ' serious ' too !!

Wonderful !!!

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« Reply #79 on: 06/08/2006 19:04:04 »
You can?  Please put us in shock!  LOL  Love ya babes!

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« Reply #80 on: 06/08/2006 19:16:38 »
Loved your old ones to! Even the funny ones!

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« Reply #81 on: 06/08/2006 21:52:27 »
Butterfly Kisses


Today I sent you butterfly kisses gently on the breeze, in hopes they would find you and set your spirit free!

I pressed my lips against my hands and held them out into the wind, each one lifted high above to light down on my own true love!

I felt their touch so lightly land there, upon your tender lips, I knew that moment was sealed in time, forever in that kiss!

Your heart, cring out to be with mine, as well My heart cries out to you! So with every Kiss I send your way, I'm telling you I love you!!

Sending butterfly kisses to surround you as you move through out your day! My heart is completely enraptured by the love that you display!

No words can really tell you, how my heart is all a flutter, that each time I think of you my heart just melts like Butter!

So I'll keep my kisses gently blowing to you upon the breeze, and each time you feel it touching your face you'll know that it is me!

So softly fly my butterfly kisses to my love this day, and bring his love right back to me, in the same, sweet tender way!


Karen
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« Reply #82 on: 06/08/2006 23:11:37 »

Karen - that is so beautiful.

Someone once left me a 'goodmorning butterfly mssg' on my laptop,
brought back happy memories.


Love you lots

Helena  xxx




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« Reply #83 on: 07/08/2006 00:14:54 »
This is my first little bit to Denny before we met again after the first time in the UK.

Beginning of Time for You and Me

It is a matter of time before we meet in NY.
You are in love with me you say, and all I can say is wow?
It was hard to believe but, I believe you now.
I can't understand it Denny, but you seem so genuine and true.
Many things I see that are in your heart.
So many mysteries that I am sure you are not ready to part.

Denny why have you chosen me, I haven't a clue?
A great distance between us with an ocean of blue.
I pray that you have not made a big mistake by giving me your heart so soon?
Tell me this is a dream that will come true before next June?

Honey, I am hoping that one day this will be.
A journey into our destiny just for you and me.
I know you have patience to wait for my heart.
And I think it is on it's way to help me start.

A new life perhaps, A new day, A moment in time for us that could be forever.
If it begins with us, then there will not be a never!


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« Reply #84 on: 07/08/2006 01:00:22 »
Something I wrote during my writing marathon...a bit of my philosophy...hey I have no name like socrates, plato...I am just Lo!

Sometimes in life you feel like youre not going anywhere
And yourself to others you compare.
But there's something you should know
Dont worry about anyone else, but your own destiny follow.

Never let anyone take away your pride
And your feelings dont be afraid to hide.
In this life for you God has a special plan
And if you believe in yourself, then you know in your heart you can.

Mistakes you will make
Some of them causing you heartache.
Just in all that you do, give it your best
Knowing you can pass life's test.

Ignore crewl remarks about you that people say
For from your dreams they only want to lead you astray
To get places in life will require you to fight
And if you want to win, then of your goals don't lose sight.

Tough times are going to lay ahead
Keep your head on straight so you won't be misled.
There will be more than one road in life that you can take and it's up to you which one you choose
You won't always win. There are times when you will lose.

You can battle defeat
Finding the truth in all the deceit.
Never substitute your values
But remain strong in your virtues.

Listen to your heart
And all the deception and lies outsmart.
When you stand up for whats right, people wont often understand
Be prepared that you a loser they will brand.

Stedfastly stand your ground
Even when pain is all around.
Your voice let them hear
Dont be afraid to let it ring out loud and clear.

In life make a positive change
Refusing to back down when others claim you're strange.
People may try to make you what they want you to be
Being yourself is the only way you will truly feel free.

Depression and stress wont have you beat
Go out and your dreams and goals complete.
Break through the negativity. Be the Blessing
By releasing your inner beauty.

Your destiny patiently awaits
So walk the straight and narrow through lifes little gates.
Yourself go and find
Leaving your past behind.


"Lo" Loretta
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« Reply #85 on: 07/08/2006 10:54:22 »
Very beautiful Loretta, You feel love very deeply my friend!

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« Reply #86 on: 07/08/2006 17:22:36 »
I do love deeply and very hard...I think when I wrote that during my marathon time with Denny's challenge...I seen what was lying ahead for my future reading this...it was sad when I read it as I thought about how in love I was with Denny and doing this for him...but I thought it was fitting for my break up with him now and the way I look at it through a different mindframe now...

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« Reply #87 on: 09/08/2006 08:48:57 »
Dedicated to my anonymous forum family friend...just for you babe!

just an eye for you
just a shoulder too
let me shed the tear and cry
so you can make it thru and not die
no matter how rough it is
no one can feel your pains
but we will be there for you even if it rains
you will be stronger friend
your little heart will be on the mend
i think highly of you
even if a cow will moo for you
you know you are the best
i don't care about the rest
here is a hug for you
don't get a pet kangaroo
your forum family is here today
and all we want is you to stay
come on out right away and play
you know we love you everyday!


"Lo" Loretta
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« Reply #88 on: 10/08/2006 07:19:25 »
Loretta That is beautiful and I hope your annonomous friend realizes that all is well and there is much love here!

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« Reply #89 on: 10/08/2006 13:49:43 »
I am sure this person does....as we were IM'ing each other and had to cheer them up through their trying moment in their life...plus the fact this person also helped me when I had to make that difficult decision of breaking up with Denny was "in my face" with different words that helped me process this decision...they did not encourage me in my decision either way, but it helped me anyway...and by God I am going to help this person too with all that is in my power!  I would do the same thing for you and many others here..I just hope this person will come and visit...we could eg them on you know..?

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« Reply #90 on: 20/08/2006 03:22:48 »
Hello.

I just wrote this in the other thread.But i thought this is the place to put it !




 No sense dwells in this feeling so fragile
It is a madness tinged with a joy so real
I see your eyes and I am lost now within you
Securing my love together with yours

It's close to the edge and I sense the overwhelming
Struggling to keep my senses as fact
For inside you is a heart that has caught me
Holding me close , with you I'm intact

For you are the dew in the morning of my life
The light of the day and the darkness of night
This blanket of seasons has sold me to you
let the mist be the cloud of the first kiss


No sense dwells in this feeling so fragile
Our lives are a recipe that can't be ignored
Hold me, betroth me to the inside of you
Timeless does beckon as I say " I do "





I love poetry too. what do you think. I just made it .

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« Reply #91 on: 20/08/2006 05:05:05 »
Cranial, It is truely beautiful. I enjoyed them.

Loretta thank-you so much for your words they mean the world you know!!!


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« Reply #92 on: 20/08/2006 20:14:49 »
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Never seeing atop the skin
It's beneath the surface where the truth lies within
Though it's not what we appear to be
But what you do that defines you

Burden holds this man for reason
In truth there be a judge for treason
Suffering soul that wants her so much
Reaching out and feeling her touch

Tortuous pain and woes are sharp
Torment folds his strangled heart
His lungs have air but pierced with shards
The glass, the discovery, that tears them apart

Fragile moments are stolen right here
The love is cherished ,a blanket of fear
reaching out for you I do
You always know..that I Love You


So, what do you think of this I just made.

I think all of the poetry here is wonderful. There is much talent here. Who would have thought it would be on a science site that these words would be made.


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« Reply #93 on: 21/08/2006 00:46:30 »
Beautiful both of them Ian!!!  Love it!  You are quite talented.

"Lo" Loretta
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« Reply #94 on: 21/08/2006 01:16:27 »
Ian, That is quite lovely! How long have you loved the written word as your poems are so revealing? You have a true gift of insight here! Amazing what one sees when one looks further then the mere words on the written page! The key to written verse, Lies in the ability of one, to not only read the written words, but to read between the lines and seek out the truth that lies there unspoken!

Karen

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« Reply #95 on: 21/08/2006 03:17:20 »
Thank you LO, you too are exceptional !

Karen. You are very kind. I think you would make a good critic of the arts. You see past the skin, into the body.

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« Reply #96 on: 21/08/2006 06:10:41 »
You are welcome kind Ian.  When you can get past skin deep and enter into the soul...you are saying much more than words spoken or written...Kudos!

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« Reply #97 on: 21/08/2006 11:28:03 »
Ian....Its not hard to see past the skin into the body when someone writes with the skill and the beauty that you possess when you take pen in hand my friend. I certainly hope you grace us with more of your lovely verse. My heart is full with the beauty of your words, They take my breath away!

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« Reply #98 on: 21/08/2006 16:05:47 »
Well Done Ian

Wonderful poetry....very deep !!

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« Reply #99 on: 21/08/2006 18:48:43 »
Karen, Thank you. You are very kind lady. But I would not want to impose more words here unless other continue to contribute too.
I am so impressed with everybody's writing also. I also found some inspiration from people here.

LO, you also have written such beautiful words.
I am so happy to be here.

Ian

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My head is not what it used to be.