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« on: 26/04/2005 09:14:39 »
since we are all friends, let's start the sharing!  as all-mighty author of this thread, I allow commenting on people's writing.  I know there are writers out there!


assignment from highschool junior year english class.
this specific assigment was inspired by hemmingway's 1st paragraph in a short piece we read.  rules: only 126 words, 4 sentences, only one 3 syllable word.  describe a place, i guess it was implied in the assignment that you had to "bring it yo life"

   Down below lies the dust of an ignored world of cement and darkness, where the scent of a wash is left only for the walls and the trumpet player to inhale in quick, sweet breaths.  Clothes on the table, damp from a tumble, and the floor, too, cold of water from the same leaky tumble, wait to be dried by time and the wind from a horn’s bell.  Dryers with open doors tease wet heaps and a hum of washers counts down another load to be thrown on the table, joining the trumpet player and sagging under the weight of the resting horn.  Four walls shelter the only light of the basement for a practice session, until lips tire and a door opens, politely, to share.

-SGC

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« Reply #1 on: 28/04/2005 15:44:27 »
"Bravo" Reads very nice, maybe you should write a novel

Andrew

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« Reply #2 on: 28/04/2005 15:53:40 »
A poem written a long time ago now

One Verse

The Universe is so small it hangs on a single particle of nothing,
 floating in a soup of emptiness for the duration of never.

People spend life looking for something they already had,
but never find what they have lost, a priceless gift that never will be repaid.

Squandered by everyone yet more expensive than everything
we can ever own.

Having gorged ourselves on the fruits of life, fulfilled its purpose
and passed our offspring the wisdom we have earned,

Participated life as well as death, ant and nation, seed and forest,
Laughed and cried.

We now pursue the ultimate goal, to have an everlasting feast at'God's Table',
as if to extend that which cannot be extended.
Thank you for your time.


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« Reply #3 on: 28/04/2005 22:08:11 »
FART

It's lewd, it's rude, it's awfully crude
Especially fun when you're in the mood
Brings a laugh when you're in the nude
Flapajack flapajack spray spray spray
Soft or silent blasted any way
Fart, guff, windypop
Never to be done in a crowded shop

Blow off, blow off, fart fart fart
Rubacheek, rubacheek it's an art art art
Underneath the bed sheets
Bubbles in the bath
Open up the window
Cuts oxygen by half

Rubbery cheeks and stained underwear
There's a fart around
Better beware !
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« Reply #4 on: 28/04/2005 22:36:22 »
Too much roughage Neil? Have to admit it made me smile though :)

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« Reply #5 on: 28/04/2005 22:38:31 »
haha, just the thought of you having written that in 1984, and thinking of all the people it's annoyed on the way.  well done.
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« Reply #6 on: 28/04/2005 22:44:45 »
How sad am I to have kept it all these years though ?..thanks indeed for your kind words Andrew and Santi2c, both of yours are 'real writing', really good stuff...thanks.

I'll post some serious non anal related stuff later..

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« Reply #7 on: 01/05/2005 09:50:22 »
Autumn leaves falling
Dance upon a breeze
Kaleidoscope of colour
Sleep cascading trees


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« Reply #8 on: 01/05/2005 23:38:59 »
The cemetery under the sun
sweet corpses
germinating
in warm coffins
so peacefully
in the summer afternoon.

-Alfredo Gomez

Say what you will, but I love this poem.  It makes me laugh or smile everytime.  My dad wrote (long time ago) so I might be a little biased.  It's just so simple and honest but against the common romantic view of death and cemeteries, but it's written warmly and respectfully.
 

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« Reply #9 on: 02/05/2005 01:41:25 »
REAR

Shed a tear for my rear
It's sitting on your plate
A comfy place filling useful space
"Yum yum beef rump I ate"

Little Billy only four
"Yum yum Beef Rump from freezer door"
Sits comfy in his chair so high
To feed his tum Beef Rump must die

Today young Billy decides no more
"No want Beef Rump from freezer door"
Already cooked and garnished on plate
Billy decided, just too late


By the way...Im not a vegetarian.

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« Reply #10 on: 02/05/2005 20:01:39 »

And if a bullock could talk
as well as frollock and walk
you would hear life is not bliss
Or does my bum look big in this


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« Reply #11 on: 03/05/2005 21:21:03 »
Long and thin goes too far in,
It does not please the ladies...
Short and thick, it does the trick,
THATS what makes the babies...

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« Reply #12 on: 24/05/2005 20:12:50 »
One day a cloud passed by
Amid a deep blue sky
Unaware and grand
Casting shadow over sand
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« Reply #13 on: 24/05/2005 23:33:26 »

If dogs could sing & cats could dance,
I'd send my budgie off to France,
Where he could learn geography,
And still be home in time for tea

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« Reply #14 on: 25/05/2005 00:17:16 »
"Circular Square"
round and round
and not and not
and not again

-SGC, GB
 

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« Reply #15 on: 07/06/2005 19:09:58 »
One day after we fell and learned to cope with living hell
We will again some day walk tall in answer to some research call
Until that day we must not falter, ‘til this great journey starts to alter
Shall it be some magic potion that someday sets our limbs in motion
Could it be some surgeon’s skill or priest of cloth my pain does kill
And If I should die before I waken, and in God’s court my soul hath taken
I will stand before my maker. Saying: I’m a giver, not a taker”!
But ‘til that day that we must all face, should we now join the research race.
Then raise a glass and toast a cry. “There but for the grace of God Go I” !
By Andrew K Fletcher  22nd June 03
 
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« Reply #16 on: 07/06/2005 19:56:16 »
When roads turn into rivers and people fall and die.
When the only growth is concrete, reaching for the sky.
Desert winds blowing, fan the mighty flame.
Forest but a memory, don't even have a name.
Seagulls feeding inland, dive upon the tips.
Pipelines belch out sewage, exposing telltale slicks
Ocean levels rising, stink of rotten fish,
No longer do they live here, or end up in our dish.
Now the oil stops flowing, and gushing from the floor,
And water is the reason for which we go to war.
Tankers held at ransom, await the highest prices,
Now the tides have turned and water is the crisis.

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« Reply #17 on: 02/10/2005 19:06:03 »
A Quote made yesterday.

It might be acceptable to have a drink, but never acceptable to let the drink have you.

Thinking about sending it to AA

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« Reply #18 on: 03/10/2005 02:16:19 »
Barefoot

Not afraid of nails or glass as we step, tread, walk, step, trip over the knots formed by tree trunks and on the dusty topsoil of the land that we live with, on, and in. We pass disfigured logs and twisted threads, smells we ignore, we are deaf, blind, and dumb, we wouldn’t if we had ability. We are not brave, loyal, or triumphant, we are weavers, hunters, and storytellers. Emotion cannot be seen in our hollow eyes, tears are dried up inside of our wooden faces, we have never sought shade, the tree’s canopy’s over our heads follows and provides. We belong to the scenery. Are we barefoot or exposed?


-"science |?s??ns| noun the intellectual and practical activity encompassing the systematic study of the structure and behavior of the physical and natural world through observation and experiment"- the dictionary
-wink |wi ng k| verb [ intrans. ] close and open one eye quickly, typically to indicate that something is a joke or a secret or as a signal of affection or greeting : he winked at Nicole as he passed. • ( wink at) pretend not to notice (something bad or illegal) : the authorities winked at their illegal trade. • (of a bright object or a light) shine or flash intermittently. noun an act of closing and opening one eye quickly, typically as a signal : Barney gave him a knowing wink- THE DICTIONARY

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« Reply #19 on: 03/10/2005 02:19:26 »
She is banging on the door to salvation,
She wants the hope and the cure for her ruined life.
She sees no beauty any more,
There is no future for her.
She lies in her coffin waiting for death's icy breath to breath and freeze her warm fleshy body.
She sees the wonders of life, but never can experience or appreciate them.
She is lost in her own depression,
In her own world that is filled with hate and greed and a vicious hunger,
not even created by her, but the ones surrounding her dead lifeless soul.
She feels agony and pain and loathing she must experience from her most trusted and beloved. She is digging her grave and as she does, the worms and dirt, decay and consume her body, her soul, her complexities, and her mind, as she continues to dig.


-"science |?s??ns| noun the intellectual and practical activity encompassing the systematic study of the structure and behavior of the physical and natural world through observation and experiment"- the dictionary
-wink |wi ng k| verb [ intrans. ] close and open one eye quickly, typically to indicate that something is a joke or a secret or as a signal of affection or greeting : he winked at Nicole as he passed. • ( wink at) pretend not to notice (something bad or illegal) : the authorities winked at their illegal trade. • (of a bright object or a light) shine or flash intermittently. noun an act of closing and opening one eye quickly, typically as a signal : Barney gave him a knowing wink- THE DICTIONARY

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« Reply #20 on: 03/10/2005 02:51:50 »
Dear Dr Nina,....great prose..thank you...is it introspective ?

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« Reply #21 on: 03/10/2005 03:32:57 »
Thank you! Actually it is my feeling on a book entitled "Go Ask Alice" an actual diary  of a teenage girl and her life in the drug world, I highly recommend it, I read it in a day (its an easy read) but for some reason I was impacted greatly by it...

-"I don't mind if you shoot me, just don't tell me"- Bob Dylan
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-wink |wi ng k| verb [ intrans. ] close and open one eye quickly, typically to indicate that something is a joke or a secret or as a signal of affection or greeting : he winked at Nicole as he passed. • ( wink at) pretend not to notice (something bad or illegal) : the authorities winked at their illegal trade. • (of a bright object or a light) shine or flash intermittently. noun an act of closing and opening one eye quickly, typically as a signal : Barney gave him a knowing wink- THE DICTIONARY

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« Reply #22 on: 03/10/2005 14:07:33 »
Nina, loved your verse about barefoot. I have a 60 year young Lady friend who never wears shoes. I also enjoy walking barefoot through grass while out with my dogs, its an amazingly relaxing experience, I often close my eyes when walking on the local golf course without shoes and socks and feel as if I am being recharged with energy. Have you tried putting your hands on the trunk of a large tree while barefoot, closing youe eyes? You can feel the trees energy flowing down through your fingers into your arms and all the way through your body. A tingling feeling that is very pleasing to the body. I have heard that women find this sensation to be even more stimulating.

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« Reply #23 on: 03/10/2005 15:40:21 »
Seeing this thread again, has made me re-evaluate all my old
stuff...this silly little saucy ditty I wrote when I was just
16....MANY years ago...and is seen here untouched ........so,
 apologies in advance !!!



THE PARTY

The party started off so well
There was John Jack Jane and Jill
Not forgetting me as well

Suddenly I heard the bell
I answered it and well
Would you believe it
It was Mary Mandy William and Nell

"Well where the Hell have you been" I said
"We've been at Wills" said Mary "in bed "
"All four of you well well" I said

Then once again the bell rang more
So of I went to answer the door
And would you believe it , it was Paula and Paul
"It's such a long time since you have called"
"Well we've been busy haven't we Paul ?"
"Oh I see, no need to explain any more"

So off we went and had some fun
It was really great YOU should have come
But if you did , don't tell your mum

So anyway, half of us went naked and dived in the pool
It was really good the water was cool
Splishing and splashing using every tool
To know our situation it wouldn't take a fool

Hell we made an awful din
Though it would have been better
If the girls joined in !!!


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« Reply #24 on: 03/10/2005 16:56:29 »
I like that Neil



"The explanation requiring the fewest assumptions is most likely to be correct."
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« Reply #25 on: 03/10/2005 19:10:08 »
hahahahahaha...You should enter a contest Neil INSPIRATIONAL!!!!!!!!!! ;-)

-"I don't mind if you shoot me, just don't tell me"- Bob Dylan
-wink |wi ng k| verb [ intrans. ] close and open one eye quickly, typically to indicate that something is a joke or a secret or as a signal of affection or greeting : he winked at Nicole as he passed. • ( wink at) pretend not to notice (something bad or illegal) : the authorities winked at their illegal trade. • (of a bright object or a light) shine or flash intermittently. noun an act of closing and opening one eye quickly, typically as a signal : Barney gave him a knowing wink- THE DICTIONARY

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« Reply #26 on: 03/10/2005 20:26:55 »
Thank you kind Sir & Mam.


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« Reply #27 on: 04/10/2005 21:46:14 »
You are most kindly welcome! ;-)

-"I think a poet is anyone who calls himself a poet"
"Being noticed can be a burden. Jesus got crusified because he got himslef noticed...So I disappear alot."
"Money doesn't talk, it swears"
" -Bob Dylan
-wink |wi ng k| verb [ intrans. ] close and open one eye quickly, typically to indicate that something is a joke or a secret or as a signal of affection or greeting : he winked at Nicole as he passed. • ( wink at) pretend not to notice (something bad or illegal) : the authorities winked at their illegal trade. • (of a bright object or a light) shine or flash intermittently. noun an act of closing and opening one eye quickly, typically as a signal : Barney gave him a knowing wink- THE DICTIONARY

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« Reply #28 on: 25/07/2006 17:34:26 »
Okay, finally putting poetry where it belongs...thanks Neil!

Love’s Betrayal


Romantic love, the kind wherein partners become lost to each other,
is a falling towards expression of lovers. Lovers choose a way,
making a decision to find themselves together. A rare gift that
goes beyond the boundaries of religion or materialism, romantic
love inspires the psyche with profound motivations for life.

Lovers are no longer in solitude; their solitude rather is enriched
by the mere presence of the other. Life becomes a journey shared,
and the destination is but the fulfillment of love. Each moment is
unveiled in glory, and mystery upon mystery of love is revealed.
Lovers discover that the yearning they once possessed in silent is
now answered through each other’s existence.

Romantic love is not an idealism professed, it is a transcendent
tryst. Lovers shape, and become shaped in turn, by the act of
devotion they share. Lovers see, and know, and feel the world to
have somehow been changed. A sanctuary is created wherein their
hearts may dwell.

As they change, lovers choose to change together, choose to re-make
the world within the image of love they hold. As they change not
together, then there is a falling away from love. Love is no longer
the center of life’s expression for them. And love has been betrayed.

Lovers chose to risk the hardness of heart sometimes experienced in
the world and ventured for the potential of loving vulnerability.
The betrayal of love becomes a process of grief, the sanctuary of
lovers is thrown down in dismay, and the gates shut. The dull ache
of betrayal to one’s inner being is the realization of being an
individual in solitude once more.

Disillusionment with the possibility of love arises. The reflections
upon the once shared world seem bitterly unrealistic. Now all that
remains is for the individual to understand, and accept, that life
does not fall apart, it merely falls into fresh patterns. This
acceptance of life, however, is dependent as well upon the
acknowledgement that love is the only realistic answer to an
unrealistic world. And what can be learned is that love sometimes
exists in contradictions.

"Lo" Loretta
"Just Me, Lo" Loretta

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« Reply #29 on: 25/07/2006 17:36:39 »
2nd piece..

A New Day Has Begun

As seconds slip into minutes...time is stealing away into hours that have gone by. Looking out the window, watching the sun slip sadly into the horizon, reaching out with its tender, subtle rays....it caresses my face, tempting me to go outside to hold onto its gentle warmth.

Another day has gone. Night has begun its slow dance across the sky. Watching the moon glowing with stars in the background draping over its fragile shoulders. Night romancing the stars filling in the background with it's slow, graceful, moves embracing the night sky.

"Lo" Loretta
"Just Me, Lo" Loretta

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« Reply #30 on: 25/07/2006 17:37:19 »
3rd Piece...

innocent seduction

imagining the crescent moon of his lips upon mine,
in-forms nightly wakefulness.
as light dances across his blue eyes,
he remains a vision solely for me.
he names me partner;
without him i would be nameless.
his gleaming, radiant smile enchanting,
he sparks something of joy within.
the way he moves re-turns earthly grace,
creating that deep ensouled peace.
night deep hair falls across his eyes to shade them from knowing,
embracing him but scant fulfillment of my desires.

"Lo" Loretta
"Just Me, Lo" Loretta

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« Reply #31 on: 25/07/2006 18:44:59 »
This 4th piece was written when I was in love with this man...lol

Denny's Dream



I heard your gentle voice whispering while walking through a field of dreams
Like falling raindrops pitter, pattering saying my love, we make a fine team.


So I hold you close in warm embrace,

 Where happiness and joy enlace.  
Just you and me here in this beautiful place,

 Where spring flowers do grace.  



In a field of dreams forever it seems with you by my side words cannot describe
This exciting feeling within me the gloominess I put aside as I walked along thinking of you in this field of dreams.


The twinkle in your eyes has faded and left a lonely heart in its place
the essence of a dream being in your presence is a picture in my mind,
a memory which leaves etched the smile upon your face.



Leave a lingering trace In my mind and heart until then I knew
You are a dream I know has come true.



 The cheeks of a face are like a rose
The tears from eyes are like the rain
Tears of joy...
Tears of pain...
We must go through this weather of life
With many things to learn
And many things to gain
For as you know
A rose will always need the rain.

"Lo" Loretta
"Just Me, Lo" Loretta

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« Reply #32 on: 25/07/2006 18:47:39 »
Here is something you romantic peeps will like I am sure...lol

5th piece

Romance is like a diamond

But romance has different facets not measured in carats, cut, color, or clarity.  

One only needs time to discover each side of love in its uniqueness.    

Romance is just not found in people, but in your atmosphere!    
You may think How? Where is my ... atmosphere of Romance?

Is there fire, water, and air?

Fire to keep it burning within and all around.
Water to keep it going and flowing through.
Air to keep it alive, like oxygen is needed to breathe.

Atmosphere is wherever and whatever you make it.
It can be a bitter cold wind nipping your cheek don't mask it within like a robe
keeping out the wind.

An ocean mist kissing your cheek, as you reflect on long lost love somewhere
which has not yet found you while walking along a beach.

A fireplace with such intensity it as if you are dancing among the flames
and are carefree with abandonment of your heart!

I have learned to expand my knowledge in this area...without a man to
learn to listen to the wind as it had wooed me when I was in
Jamaica while watching the sunrise on the beach before me showing off
her pretty arms of rays!  Gently caressing my cheek softly with her warmth
and her gentleness.

Losing oneself into the edges of romance drifting in and out as a long
winter's sleep.  I wake up and find romance is just sitting there.

"Lo" Loretta
"Just Me, Lo" Loretta

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« Reply #33 on: 25/07/2006 18:48:21 »
That will be the last piece I submit for now...I was in Jamaica when I wrote that piece...

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« Reply #34 on: 25/07/2006 19:07:28 »
           PASSIONS KISS


Possessing my soul he holds me bound.

Ascending me from heights and softly bringing me down!

Sending my heart racing, in fervent flurry.

Seducing me sweetly, and removing my worries;

Intertwined in a web of passion, my body, my soul, are his to fashion!

Oh desire, and love hold us bound, so high in love we can't touch down!

Never alone, my heart sings, love to my soul, my sweet lover brings!

So sweetly enraptured by thee, my heart is yours, I shall not flee!

Kisses bind me to you, and I stay. To live within you, each and every day!

Intertwined souls, hearts sing in tune, love like fire that we consume.

Satiating each moment in time, so as not to loose this love of mine.

Soaring so high, my true love and I, knowing our love shall never die!

                                .........Karen W.
                                    
                                  
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"Life is not measured by the number of Breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away."

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« Reply #35 on: 25/07/2006 19:27:24 »
Beautiful Karen!!

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« Reply #36 on: 25/07/2006 19:42:52 »
Thanks Loretta, I kinda Like it myself! Yours was also a thing of much beauty friend! I love poetry! Got to scoot to work Have a great day! I won't be off till after 8:00 PM tonight as I have staff meeting after closing. I will try to catch you then ! ....Karen

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« Reply #37 on: 25/07/2006 19:48:47 »
Okay, you take care and don't work too hard...I am wasting this day so far, if you catch my meaning....lol  I will talk to you then.

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« Reply #38 on: 25/07/2006 20:59:08 »


Karen and Loretta,

What truly wonderful poems.
You've set my heart racing.
I hope you will continue to give as more pleasure in the future.

Love you lots

Helena   xxx


 

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« Reply #39 on: 25/07/2006 21:16:15 »
Helena!

Thanks all of which are inspired...hehe
I may submit a few more...but had a few from the breakup, but it is pretty hard,edgy, stuff...you romantic peeps might not appreciate it as much...hehe

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« Reply #40 on: 25/07/2006 23:35:10 »

The moment




He walking into the room, and started to talk to some friends.  Some he knew from days of old, and some were strangers to him.  There were interesting people, and boring people; there were pretty girls and ugly girls, and one by one they passed before him.  Then, for a moment he saw a face in the distance.  He did not know the face, and yet it seemed familiar, like he had always known her; or at least, that he should have always known her.  It was not a pretty face, just a plain ordinary face, and yet the eyes were full of life, but yet there was a hint of sadness within them.  He was intrigued.  Had he met her before.  He could not remember, but he was sure he would not have forgotten her if he had.  He walked across to her and introduced himself.  They started to talk, but he cannot recall what they spoke about, for he heard her voice, smelt her fragrance, and saw her eyes, but knew nothing of the rest of the world.  She smiled, and then laughed, and became the more beautiful with each laugh.  Occasionally his eyes would wonder down her body as she wriggled with laughter and animated conversation.  Every inch of her burned into his minds eye, and the fragrance of her was so powerful it was dizzying.  In his mind, he had long ago undressed her, or maybe she have never been dressed, for it seemed to him that she had always been as naked and vulnerable as the day she was born.  She reached out, and for a moment her hand touched his skin, and for that moment time stood still, while his heart raced ahead.  As that moment passed, he reached out to grab her hand, to prevent that moment from passing; but somehow he stopped himself, and his hand never reached her.  The spoke and laughed, and his eyes never left her, and the world around them was not there.  Then her friend came and spoke to her a moment.  She apologised, but said she had to leave.  She turned to leave, and turned around one more time, held his gaze for maybe just a few moments, smiled, then turned again, and walked out of his life.

His friend came to talk to him, but he could not talk.  For a moment he had dreamt he was in heaven, and now nothing in the world seemed real.  He excused himself, and left the party.  Maybe when he awoke in the morning, this dream, like so many other dreams of the night, will vanish into the unreality.  Maybe sanity will return with the dawn.  But right now, the dream of but a few moments ago was the only reality that he could see.



George
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« Reply #41 on: 26/07/2006 03:32:02 »
George I love that! I have felt like that! Very beautiful! Thank-you.....Karen

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« Reply #42 on: 26/07/2006 04:33:53 »
I posted this in another forum, but it's one of my faves.
This was written by my son 6 years ago. He was 7.

Mom

She is fair and good
And not a jerk but kind
She knows what is best


He's smart and talented.
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« Reply #43 on: 26/07/2006 04:54:55 »
Here is another wonderful poem from my talented son.  This was a writing assignment at school.

Mom
Mom is a warm fire that never goes out, even when drenched in water.

Mom is a pillow, not to hard, yet not to soft.

Mom is a song that is stuck in your head, even when you don't want it to be.

Mom is a nice car with chromed rims and a nice sound system.

Mom is that great bus ride home from school, after you've had a long, hard day.



He learned early that being nice to Mom gets you STUFF.
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« Reply #44 on: 26/07/2006 05:03:47 »
George you are stealing my heart!!!  Beautiful! MWAHHHHH!!!  

Carolyn, how sweet...he is adorable!!!

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« Reply #45 on: 26/07/2006 11:41:13 »



George - what a beautiful, sensitive dream........if only.


Love you lots.

Helena   xxx



 

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« Reply #46 on: 26/07/2006 12:03:19 »
definitely that moment was a dream....hehe

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« Reply #47 on: 26/07/2006 18:51:28 »


More please George.


Love you lots

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« Reply #48 on: 26/07/2006 21:01:16 »
OK, I shall see if I can dream up something anew (believe it or not, traditionally I could not write fiction or creatively to save my life, and English was about my worst subject at school – this metamorphosis is merely an aspect of senility creeping in).  In the meantime, while my brain goes off on holiday to refresh itself, I shall cheat, by regurgitating some of the old.

Back at the beginning of 2005, when my mother was ill in hospital, and I was feeling it was one of those cases when one feels the disadvantage of living alone, of not having someone to come home to and just curl up in their arms and forget all the pain of the world outside.  At that time, I penned (well, technically, keyed) the following:

The Touch of a Woman


That the boy within the man might find solace in the touch of a woman,
That in her arms he may find shelter and beauty,
That in her healing touch may the cares of this world disappear,
That in the warmth of her body and her soul, may his heart find warmth,
That with the touch of her skin against his, may his heart race, and his mind forget,
That for one moment, may he be a carefree boy again.




George
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« Reply #49 on: 26/07/2006 21:39:25 »


George - how beautiful, and how touching.


Love you lots

Helena  xxx